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Story of Cornelius - Chapter 1: Page 03 by DarkmaneTheWerewolf Story of Cornelius - Chapter 1: Page 03 by DarkmaneTheWerewolf
I'd actually wanted to change Ornstein's name when i started submitting the first few pages, but i've been calling him Ornstein for such a long time that i know i'll just get confused if i did ><

I don't know, the shading for Cornelius is bothering me, on one hand, i wanted it to be somewhat silhouetted as he jumps down, but on the other, i'm thinking that to you- the viewer, it's just making it look like his natural colour is darker than it should be and so the bigger shot just looks odd =(

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SlippyMagnus Nov 9, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
It's fine, DarkMane!

I thought he was darker (as you worried,) but then once I read the larger shot, i realised that it was shadow from the Arch and the light of the lighting behind Cornelius.

It's Fine, and in fact, I'm now awaiting the Newer episodes, as I may not comment on all, I'll be reading, and occasionally updating!
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DarkmaneTheWerewolf Nov 10, 2012  Professional General Artist
Thanks =p That was exactly what i was trying to communicate XD Though now, i worry that i may have sub-conciously influenced your judgement by expressing my worries in the Artist's Comments ><

Well i'm glad you're enjoying it so far =p I don't expect people to comment on all pages or anything, but i do appreciate if people pointed out mistakes or let me know if something has been poorly portrayed or something, such that they become confused or gotten the wrong impression.
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SlippyMagnus Nov 10, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
/Understands

I wish i knew how to do any of this...
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DarkmaneTheWerewolf Nov 10, 2012  Professional General Artist
Hey now, it's still all a learning curve for me too XD Thats why i would appreciate feedback and critisisms =p I don't usually do comics ><
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SlippyMagnus Nov 10, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I think that everyone would like a bit more criticism. I love the people on DeviantART but the people are WAAAAY too nice.

I've never seen a criticism on my page >,<
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DarkmaneTheWerewolf Nov 11, 2012  Professional General Artist
Better than Youtube though, the amount of idiot comments you get on Youtube is just unreal DX Seriously, for my Unicorn's Fotune animation alone, someone complained that it wasn't MLP, someone else asked if the baby unicorn died and someone thought it was something to do wth Fantasia. :unimpressed:
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SlippyMagnus Nov 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You are right on the money there!

Youtube is INFAMOUS for having user errors out the wazoo.

I don't have any reason to make videos for my Youtube, (Why gamble all that user-issue without some huge gain?) but I'm sure if I did, people would find SOMEthing to complain about.

People on the internet are really quite good at finding things to peck at.
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DarkmaneTheWerewolf Nov 11, 2012  Professional General Artist
Indeed, I just ignore the stupid comments, it's just not worth the time and whatever you do, someone is guarenteed to complain about the most trivial thing. It's different here though, if you do get complaints, its usually well thought out and good constructive critisism, not a troll or a 12 year old =p
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I think the color works just fine in the last panel. The increased contrast works with the closer perspective, greater detail, and emotional content (plus, being the bottom panel, it makes some intuitive sense, because this is where we expect close things to be in an un-paneled image). The only thing that maybe does seem odd is that the shadow in the middle panel indicates a light source right behind him (though it could be above the arch, and that's why we don't see it).

It's all understandable to this viewer.
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DarkmaneTheWerewolf Nov 8, 2012  Professional General Artist
Thanks for sharing your thoughts =) I was hoping to make it look like the light was from far outside, hence the long shadow >< That middle panel just seems a bit problematic DX

It's nice to hear what you people have to say so i get an idea of whether i've drawn something that conveys what i wanted to get across or not =p

Btw, your username is awesome and amuses me because Mangos are one of my most favorite fruits =p
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